Student 3

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‘Don’t be afraid to stand for what you believe in, even if that means standing alone’

 

I like that quote because to me my parents don’t want me to join the military or go to expensive college. If I don’t go to college I won’t get a great job. I want to go to college same time doing training for military they don’t want me to go because they don’t want me to die out in war or anything happens to me. They are scared but I want to do this I want to go I been talking about it since freshmen year my parents didn’t think that I will actually sign up for it.

 

The same time I am in military I will attend college. I want to do military for at least 4 years no more than that I want to come back try and start a family. I will go to college in military I want to do auto body on cars, clean out car, engine, interior, paint the car put it all together and don’t charge people more than the car does I will be cheap. That was my plan A plan B was going into military. I want to own my own body shop after military I have 2 plans after high school.

 

My parents don’t like my choice about military they are trying to get me out of it. I already made my choice. My brothers and sister even sad that I will go into military every time I talk about it to my family from out of town my brothers, parents, sister cry because they thought I wouldn’t go into military my family from out of town congratulates me but my own don’t that why I picked this quote i believe that I will try my best to come home safe I think that I am alone they won’t let me go don’t agree what I believe in to me I think m alone till my own family agrees with me.

 

Sometimes I have doubts in going into military because my uncle was in it for half of his life. He came back him and his best friend went in together station same branch my uncle and his friend were on their final tour my uncle car died didn’t turn on his friend was a block away he was on foot he was going to my uncle then there was gun fire my uncle got scared because of his friend he stop trying to start the hum-v then he saw his friend their injured on the ground his left leg was squirting blood. My uncle saved his friends life when the helicopter came and picked them up my uncle came back half their half here because he was traumatized from the blood he never seen that much he told me so I understand why my family don’t want me to go into military they think I will end up like my uncle.

 

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